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Flight by ALEXACEDEATH

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I honestly don't know much about bird anatomy and such so this will be difficult but here goes...

I notice the paper you used, Was this just a little sketch? If so my first comment makes more sense. Your pencil is too blunt. It's difficult to work the right details and tones into your work if you don't have a sharp pencil. It also helps you be more accurate about where you place your strokes.

The bird looks pretty good. You have a nice texture happening for the feathers but perhaps a reference would help improve the realism. A trick is to make the strokes follow the contours of the shape. this means that because the bird's head is "spherical" the lines could have curved over the surface and added more of a realism.

Probably another thing that let you down is the lack of light source. The whole image is shades of grey. You have no dark shadow and no light which would have helped the image read better. For instance you could have used those tones to emphasise what's bird and what's tree.

The tree is good. There's not much to say about trees. I like the texture of the bark. Though perhaps it's a little too uniform? Some bark could have been wider than others, And some branches could have started earlier or curved uniquely. Also I assume that's a flower on the bottom branch? It blends in with the leaves a bit. Use contrast to make things stand out.

All in all a good picture that could have been executed a little better. Still great work, keep it up.

As usual take my critiques with a grain of sand. (Also sorry for the star ratings... It's not a unique concept...?)
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ALEXACEDEATH Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Actually yes and no, this is a sketch but I had no model whatsoever I did evrything by memory. And I see what you mean in terms of texture and lighting Ill keep that in mind for next time. Ok Ill keep these in mind! :D Thanks again for the critique! And its ok Im just here to improve stars and everything just motivate me more! :D
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Just-a-Bud Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I thought it was a sketch and that's why I assumed you didn't have a ref. Kind of impressive since I know I can't draw a bird without a ref.
Glad I could help. Good luck.
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ALEXACEDEATH Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Thanks a ton! :D
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Just-a-Bud Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome ^u^
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